‘Ingrid!’
I turned and there you were, leaning out of the car window, into the rain. ‘Get in, get in, you’re drenched.’ You had that smile on your face, the one you must have practiced, the one that always made me weak. I got in.
I stared at you as I dripped onto your leather passenger seat. ‘Suited and booted,’ you said, wiggling the knot of your silk tie in the rear view mirror. ‘Will I do?’ You already knew that you would. ‘A wedding. Come with me!’
‘Looking like this?’
‘You look good enough to eat,’ you said.
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I started with a wolf in sheep’s clothing when I looked at this photo, but then I seemed to move onto a wolf in wolf’s clothing. Never mind, we could always just say it was ‘lamb to the slaughter’. And for those of you who missed him, the ‘you’ in this story is Rex.
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For those who don’t know how Friday Fictioneers works, this picture (this time supplied by Sandra Crook) is our inspiration for our weekly online writing group hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Each story is only about 100 words long, so why not read a few others: click here to read some more or to join in.
And please comment below with any suggestions on mine, or just to show you’ve visited.
Claire Fuller 
You really got that personality across in such a few words. Good work.
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Thanks Sandra. I think I’m beginning to understand how Rex ticks.
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Good stuff. Although I have to be honest and say I struggle a bit with second person at times…an awful lot of you and you’re, as you’d expect 🙂 Just takes a bit of getting used to.
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That’s a good point. I do have a lot of you in the speach, as well as the person ‘you’. I might take a look at those again. Thanks!
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That is a terrible situation to be in. Ingrid better run! By the way, I didn’t find the number of “you”s in the story distracting. However, in the photo, I’d say there are far too many ewes. Ugh, I almost hate myself for that corny joke!
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Groan! After I looked at it, I was only really able to change one, so I left it as it was. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Claire
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Great story. I agree with Sandra ; Rex’s personality comes through so well…excellent dialogue!
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Thanks Jan, glad you liked it.
Claire
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Good story and ewe are so clever. I like the story and the way it’s written. Nice job! Nan 🙂
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Thanks Nan. Oh, those ewe jokes could run and run…
Claire
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Dear Claire,
In my mind I keep hearing, “‘Will you step into my parlor?’ said the spider to the fly.” Well written take on the prompt.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Ah, a good way of looking at it. Thanks Rochelle.
Claire
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A wolf in wolf’s clothing. Nice. This is one of those tales that make you want to yell RUN AWAY!
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Dear Clare,
I love the way this story is far removed from the prompt, yet deliciously not so. This is the type of story that makes me read those folks on my reading list each week. Thank you for not disappointing.
Aloha,
Doug
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Claire, Good story as usual, especially the dialogue. Good use of the prompt. 🙂 —Susan
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Great story, Claire. I like that you used second person POV. I know a lot of people are opposed to it, but It’s unique. You didn’t follow all the other sheep who used first or third person POV, including me. 🙂
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The story. of the wolf came through in all it’s menace.. but just how bad does he bite.. and after all the rain was terrible…
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A dry car on a rainy day isn’t always the safe place it appears to be. I haven’t been around long enough to get to know Rex, but I have a feeling I’m going to love hating him.
Cheers!
Marie Gail
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Oh, ewe are so good at these tiny tales, Claire! (Sorry, sorry, everyone must be so fed up with the sheep jokes by now!)
I’m intrigued by Our Endless Numbered Days and hope it does really well. I’ve added it to my Goodreads bookshelf.
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