Flash fiction: Parked

parked

It was a Tuesday when Nanette decided to tackle the garden; two days after she had buried her father. She found a box of tools under the sink, the cardboard falling apart and everything inside rusted. How many years had it sat there she wondered. She drove into town and hired a petrol strimmer, gloves and hat with a visor.

She cut a swathe through from the house to the bank, where it dropped away to the sea. And there, incongruously at the end of the garden, she uncovered her mother’s car. How many years had it sat there she wondered?

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For those who don’t know how Friday Fictioneers works, this picture, this time from Roger Bultot, is our inspiration for our weekly online writing group hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Each story is only about 100 words long, so why not read a few others: click here to read some more or to join in.

And please comment below with any suggestions on mine, or just to show you’ve visited.

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For any US readers who are interested, I’ve recently been able to reveal the North American jacket for my novel, Our Endless Numbered Days, which will be released on 17th March 2015. You can see it here

30 thoughts on “Flash fiction: Parked

  1. The repetition on this worked very well, and captured the reflective mood of the main character. The image of the car at the bottom of the garden was quite shocking in its own way and the distance between her and her parents comes through beautifully without any reference. I always enjoy reading your work Claire – a pair of safe hands. 🙂

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  2. Dear Claire,

    The last line took my breath away and made me go back and read again. You’ve skillfully layered the back story between the lines. Well done.

    Love your book jacket. I’m looking forward to reading between the covers. 😉

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. Dear Claire, Not a close family, i assume! Good story and intertwined with lots of vines. Great job as usual! Oh yes, I love your book cover – it is so cute! Are those bugs making the shadow on her right? Nan 🙂

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  4. How many years, indeed! Nice work, Claire! As a writer, I am often interested in the right ways to break the rules. Here, you break the rule of repetition in a short piece (You know, the one that says not to repeat yourself when writing flash fiction.) to great effect. Well done.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

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  5. I’m intrigued by this story.. the end-line changed the whole story.. but it’s like a story where i still need to find a few more dots to draw the lines.. and really those pesky little dots means that it can be so many different stories.. the detachment of Nanette is also intriguing.. she seem to have been a little bit absent in their lives for a while.

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  6. Claire, If the mother was still in the car, that would be a chilling mystery. I agree that the daughter seems to have been gone a while and come back for the funeral. Your cover looks great. It should draw the reader’s attention. Thanks for explaining those publishing terms. I learned something new. Well written as always. 🙂 —Susan

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