There was a place I went to when I wanted to be alone. In the woods, high up, just before the peaty ground turned to rocks. I made a den there by twisting the vines that hung about the trees, and knitting the ferns that grew so vigourously I had to wade through them like a shallow sea. It was my nest and I was a weaverbird.
I took the sheet music with me and lay on a bed of moss to read it – humming the symphony that filled my head. That’s where I first saw Ruben – just his legs walking past the opening.
This piece of writing was for the 100 word (or so) prompt for Madison Woods’ #Fridayfictioneers. I’d be very happy to receive comments and constructive feedback.
How sweet. It felt like you were talking to me, telling me about your day. So did you talk to Ruben at that time? Or did you wait until later?
I think she talks to Ruben later. She’s scared of him at first – she believes that she’s all alone in the woods. Thanks for your comment – sorry I took so long to reply, but I missed these first three – they’ve been waiting approval for a week!
I love the budding composer snugly hidden in her nest! Of course, we don’t know yet what role Ruben will play, do we?
Thanks for your comment. I do have some plans for Ruben, so watch this space, as they say!
My husband’s first glimpse of me was my feet, walking past his dorm room to see a friend. He says he fell in love with me there and then. This is a more romantic tale, but it sound like it’s going to end up the same.
Loved it. Thanks for the memories 🙂
http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/07/19/through-the-grapevine-ff-200712/
I really like that idea – that you could fall in love from just seeing a little bit of someone. I might use that, I hope that’s ok?
Of course!
I’d like to know more about Ruben,where will it lead?
Thanks Gilly. Who knows…
I’m impressed that she can actually read sheet music and translate that into melody. Nice tone in this piece. I like the nest.
http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/07/bittersweet.html
Thanks Rochelle – this is part of a longer piece all about music – which she learns to read. I’ll come and visit yours…
I really liked this, loved the self-comparison to a weaver-bird and nest. And I’m very intrigued about this ‘Ruben’. Great story – thanks for joining us!
Thanks Madison. I’ve been writing to your prompts for a few weeks now – really inspiring.
Loved this! Welcome!
Thanks for visiting
Hi ~ Welcome to FF’s. I love how you built your secret place/den in the wooded area with grapevines, etc. And rested on soft moss to read your music. Feels like the beg’g of a longer story. Would like to know more about Ruben. Tks for visiting me. A few young readers didn’t understand what I meant about Strawberry Fields so I added a note at the end ..w/a few photos. Revisit if you wish an explanation as well. Tks Lora… http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com
Thanks for the comment Lora. It is part of a longer story.
I think linking the activities of the weaverbird with the way the vines were intertwined to form the ‘den’ was a stroke of genius. A really good intro this – I’d certainly want to read on from here. Well done.
http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/07/19/triple-exposure-friday-fictioneers-july-2012/
Thanks Sandra – that’s very nice of you to say. I’ll come and take a look at yours.
This piece made me want to know the narrator and read more about what’s going to happen, with those passing legs foreshadowing an interesting encounter.
cheers,
Lorelei
http://www.westcoastwriters.blogspot.com/2012/07/friday-fictioneers-late-grape-arbor.html
Thanks for your comment Lorelie, I’ll go and take a look at yours.