Short story: Morning swim

At first Ingrid only swam when she could get a babysitter, but eventually the call of the water was so strong, she left her children sleeping; always returning before they woke and never telling Rex what she had done.

She especially liked to swim in the early mornings after the river flooded. The idea of submerged paths and fences and even barbed wire lying beneath the still, grey water, thrilled her.

And when she returned home, goose-bumped and muddy, her hair would drip onto the cheeks of her sleeping children, and she would promise to never leave them again.

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Sorry that this week’s story is about wild swimming again, but I’m having a bit of thing about it in the book I’m writing. (To read last week’s, click here.)

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50 thoughts on “Short story: Morning swim

  1. Wild swimming – such an evocative phrase. And light years away from my idea of a good time! 🙂 Enjoyed this, I got a sense of Ingrid’s spirit of freedom and independence.

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  2. As an avid early morning rogue swimmer I quite like this. Water is my sanctuary, my escape but the touch of the danger lurking under the water was an interesting layer to me. The thrill she felt on the edge of danger while her life slumbers to the wayside was delightful.

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  3. Dear Erin,

    I’m with DCT. I’m a bit of a naiad myself and love the water. Water is where I’m happiest. And as I enjoy the water, I enjoyed reading about your wild swimmer. Good one.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Lovely prose and a strong depiction of this character. I would have liked to see some more completeness to the story (perhaps a more definitive ending, or even a twist to the tale), but I appreciate how hard it is in 100 words. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Happy writing!

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  5. I like that Ingrid takes this secret time for herself although I don’t think leaving your children…even if sleeping…is such a great idea. I’m thinking Ingrid is feeling some deep seated “pressure” of some sort… Well done…you got us all thinking!

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